Do me a favor, be nitpicky, and...

bardy · 08-24-2005, 05:21 PM

edit my resume. I edited out all phone numbers, not that it really matters, but yeah.

Enjoy.

And I have stuff to put in an AWARDS section but it doesn't really fit.

Here

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:35 PM

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:37 PM

actually, I don't like the objective. I would put something like 'apply my knowledge' because you make it sound like you are using them for your own gains and not to help the company.

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:39 PM

• Preparing lab rock samples by coring, sawing, and grinding.

I would change that to sound more technical.

bardy · 08-24-2005, 05:40 PM

eh yeah but I couldnt think of anything else to say. That's what the majority of my friends wrote as well.

Companies come to my department recruiting us, so I am not really in the position where the layout and objective statement mean a whole lot--its pretty much all about the work history and sometimes the GPA.

I just don't want the bullets under work history to sound stupid.

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:44 PM

I don't know if I am right about this but the tense changes kind of bothers me. I understand why you are in the present tense for your current job and then past tense for your past job but it still bothers me. I would look into that.

I would change the word 'made'. Maybe prepared?

and I would write 'references available upon request' at the bottom since you have room and it seems like a standard thing to do.

other than that I like it.

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:45 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by vipbrj
eh yeah but I couldnt think of anything else to say. That's what the majority of my friends wrote as well.

Companies come to my department recruiting us, so I am not really in the position where the layout and objective statement mean a whole lot--its pretty much all about the work history and sometimes the GPA.

I just don't want the bullets under work history to sound stupid.

it's about your objective too, whether or not you think it is, so change the objective, it sucks.

pink_ribbon_scars · 08-24-2005, 05:46 PM

You can put more action into the sentence by not nominalizing your key verbs

• Preparing lab rock samples by coring, sawing, and grinding.

becomes something like

•Core, saw, and grind lab rock samples in preparation for [whatever you are preparing them for]

(that is, unless preparing is a stronger verb than the other three...)

Okay, now I will check out your resume.

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:47 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by pink_ribbon_scars
You can put more action into the sentence by not nominalizing your key verbs

• Preparing lab rock samples by coring, sawing, and grinding.

becomes something like

•Core, saw, and grind lab rock samples in preparation for [whatever you are preparing them for]

(that is, unless preparing is a stronger verb than the other three...)

Okay, now I will check out your resume.

do you agree with me on the objective?

pink_ribbon_scars · 08-24-2005, 05:49 PM

At my career and placement services center at the U of C, they always say there's no reason to put a generic objective. You can communicate that in a discussion/interview or in a cover letter. They tell us to never put an objective on our resume. I've seen a lot on resumes of people applying to the place where I work, but I was never impressed or enticingly informed by someone's objective.

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:51 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by pink_ribbon_scars
At my career and placement services center at the U of C, they always say there's no reason to put a generic objective. You can communicate that in a discussion/interview or in a cover letter. They tell us to never put an objective on our resume. I've seen a lot on resumes of people applying to the place where I work, but I was never impressed or enticingly informed by someone's objective.

I've been told that too but resumes look so vacant with out it.

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:51 PM

hey, you niggers want to look at my resume then too?

pink_ribbon_scars · 08-24-2005, 05:52 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Jai Guru Deva
hey, you niggers want to look at my resume then too?

sure nigger

pink_ribbon_scars · 08-24-2005, 05:52 PM

http://caps.uchicago.edu/resources/pdfs/resume.pdf

that's the handout they give us.

i'm still thinking about your resume, brady.

bardy · 08-24-2005, 05:54 PM

thanks guys for the input

I think I need a general objective because the companies are coming in to interview for summer internships as well as permanent jobs... so its a useful reminder for them as to why I am there.

Mayfuck · 08-24-2005, 05:55 PM

you're welcome

wHATcOLOR · 08-24-2005, 05:56 PM

we should all be forced to make netphorian resumes. why we aer here, what kind of boarding we've done in the past including here, what kind of boarding we hope to do in the future, etc. what we're good at boardwise, noteworthy stuff. it'd be a real good 'get to know your fellow netphorian' exercise

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 05:58 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Jerome
we should all be forced to make netphorian resumes. why we aer here, what kind of boarding we've done in the past including here, what kind of boarding we hope to do in the future, etc. what we're good at boardwise, noteworthy stuff. it'd be a real good 'get to know your fellow netphorian' exercise

it would be fun to "edit" your fellow phorian resumes!

wHATcOLOR · 08-24-2005, 05:59 PM

someone make a spinoff, i don't get taken seriously enough here for this to take off under my name. jai, your domain master contest is going swimmingly, how about you

Travis Meeks · 08-24-2005, 06:01 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Jerome
someone make a spinoff, i don't get taken seriously enough here for this to take off under my name. jai, your domain master contest is going swimmingly, how about you

swimmingly as well brotha!!!

wHATcOLOR · 08-24-2005, 06:05 PM

i didn't word that very clearly, though i'm happy you're doing swimmingly. i meant since you're successful at rallying people around a cause, perhaps you would be the right man to start a netphorian resume movement. it could be sweet. and it doesn't have to be right now, we can wait till the domain master competition is over or soemthign

Travis Meeks · 08:34 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Jerome
i didn't word that very clearly, though i'm happy you're doing swimmingly. i meant since you're successful at rallying people around a cause, perhaps you would be the right man to start a netphorian resume movement. it could be sweet. and it doesn't have to be right now, we can wait till the domain master competition is over or soemthign

Actually I think that you are on to something here Jerome. I, Jai Guru Deva, have single handedly caused a significant number of netphorians to stop masturbating. WHAT A FEAT!!!! I have underestimated my netphorian powers. How foolish of me to doubt myself!

I will take your request into consideration Jerome. Your cause is noble and your heart is pure. However I must refrain on taking part in your cause at the moment due to the physical, mental, and spiritual strain the commitments to my, as you so eloquently put it, domain master competition. But fear not Jerome, I will one day join your cause and bring you to the netphoria promise land you so frantically seek.

pink_ribbon_scars · 08-24-2005, 07:17 PM

I got bored and picky and fucked around with it. You can see my edits but of course you can disagree with most of them. You can see my edits by going to Tools>Track Changes and Edit>Markup.

http://www.partyhard.info/gerhl/netp...20resume-3.doc

in short, i would:

-put all geo related programs in one column and all general computer programs in the next column
-make two columns for your addresses to they can be aligned better
-delete the space before your email address
-change your formatting or your margins so that your awards will fit (there are about 50 ways you can do this)
- i agree that in your objective, i would take the focus off of what you want out of the job and put the focus onto what a great asset you will be due to your experience and skills
-it's a matter of personal taste, but i could scratch "Responsibilities *******[d]:" because that's implied
-i would keep formatting conventions the same through the whole resume (ie, all dates first, all organizations second and in bold, all positions third and in itallics)
-remove the periods from the ends of these lines:
Summer Intern, Rinker Materials, Miami, FL.
Student member.
Treasurer.
- Possibly capitalize the C in (GEM) committee Secretary
-put the word "expected" before your graduation date
-"loaded to failure" makes no sense to me but it probably makes sense to you since you know the mining jargon and i don't

you axed for it.

bardy · 08-24-2005, 07:50 PM

thanks so much, I used most of your suggestions! I didn't end up including my awards because the names of them are really long and I could only fit one on there... oh well

but, seriously, THANKS!

Mayfuck · 08-24-2005, 08:24 PM

Hey no problem thats what friends are for.

bardy · 08-24-2005, 08:27 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Mayfuck
Hey no problem thats what friends are for.

shutup julio you were no help

DeviousJ · 08-24-2005, 08:40 PM

You want really picky? You added a period after FL but not VA.

Also, you might want to make your date format more consistent, you have 05/05 for one then you dropped the double digits and went for 8/05. And one of the hyphens is stuck to a date. Maybe put your email under the other address too?

Oh there are periods after some of the entries in the last section but not others. I guess you should keep them in so it matches everything else. That's all I got

RopeyLopey · 08-24-2005, 08:44 PM

hey Travis, where's the resume?

also, I liked the resume of Liz way more ( I mean her own she has posted some time ago)

Travis Meeks · 08-25-2005, 10:11 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by RopeyLopey
hey Travis, where's the resume?

also, I liked the resume of Liz way more ( I mean her own she has posted some time ago)

I realized that I do not have any web space to host this

unless someone wants to help....

pink_ribbon_scars · 08-25-2005, 10:16 AM

my friend julius hosted mine and my vipbrj edits, so i can't help

08-24-2005, 05:21 PM	#1
bardy Immortal Location: helllllloooooo!! Posts: 20,831	Do me a favor, be nitpicky, and... edit my resume. I edited out all phone numbers, not that it really matters, but yeah. Enjoy. And I have stuff to put in an AWARDS section but it doesn't really fit. Here

08-24-2005, 05:56 PM	#17
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08-24-2005, 05:35 PM	#2
Travis Meeks Rambling on Posts: 20,548	no

08-24-2005, 05:37 PM	#3
Travis Meeks Rambling on Posts: 20,548	actually, I don't like the objective. I would put something like 'apply my knowledge' because you make it sound like you are using them for your own gains and not to help the company.

08-24-2005, 05:39 PM	#4
Travis Meeks Rambling on Posts: 20,548	• Preparing lab rock samples by coring, sawing, and grinding. I would change that to sound more technical.

08-24-2005, 05:40 PM	#5
bardy Immortal Location: helllllloooooo!! Posts: 20,831	eh yeah but I couldnt think of anything else to say. That's what the majority of my friends wrote as well. Companies come to my department recruiting us, so I am not really in the position where the layout and objective statement mean a whole lot--its pretty much all about the work history and sometimes the GPA. I just don't want the bullets under work history to sound stupid.

08-24-2005, 05:44 PM	#6
Travis Meeks Rambling on Posts: 20,548	I don't know if I am right about this but the tense changes kind of bothers me. I understand why you are in the present tense for your current job and then past tense for your past job but it still bothers me. I would look into that. I would change the word 'made'. Maybe prepared? and I would write 'references available upon request' at the bottom since you have room and it seems like a standard thing to do. other than that I like it.

08-24-2005, 05:46 PM	#8
pink_ribbon_scars At the beginning Location: GJ 1214 b Posts: 10,760	You can put more action into the sentence by not nominalizing your key verbs • Preparing lab rock samples by coring, sawing, and grinding. becomes something like •Core, saw, and grind lab rock samples in preparation for [whatever you are preparing them for] (that is, unless preparing is a stronger verb than the other three...) Okay, now I will check out your resume.

08-24-2005, 05:49 PM	#10
pink_ribbon_scars At the beginning Location: GJ 1214 b Posts: 10,760	At my career and placement services center at the U of C, they always say there's no reason to put a generic objective. You can communicate that in a discussion/interview or in a cover letter. They tell us to never put an objective on our resume. I've seen a lot on resumes of people applying to the place where I work, but I was never impressed or enticingly informed by someone's objective.

08-24-2005, 05:51 PM	#12
Travis Meeks Rambling on Posts: 20,548	hey, you niggers want to look at my resume then too?

08-24-2005, 05:52 PM	#14
pink_ribbon_scars At the beginning Location: GJ 1214 b Posts: 10,760	http://caps.uchicago.edu/resources/pdfs/resume.pdf that's the handout they give us. i'm still thinking about your resume, brady.

08-24-2005, 05:54 PM	#15
bardy Immortal Location: helllllloooooo!! Posts: 20,831	thanks guys for the input I think I need a general objective because the companies are coming in to interview for summer internships as well as permanent jobs... so its a useful reminder for them as to why I am there.

08-24-2005, 05:55 PM	#16
Mayfuck Banned Location: i'm from japan also hollywood Posts: 57,812	you're welcome

08-24-2005, 07:17 PM	#23
pink_ribbon_scars At the beginning Location: GJ 1214 b Posts: 10,760	I got bored and picky and fucked around with it. You can see my edits but of course you can disagree with most of them. You can see my edits by going to Tools>Track Changes and Edit>Markup. http://www.partyhard.info/gerhl/netp...20resume-3.doc in short, i would: -put all geo related programs in one column and all general computer programs in the next column -make two columns for your addresses to they can be aligned better -delete the space before your email address -change your formatting or your margins so that your awards will fit (there are about 50 ways you can do this) - i agree that in your objective, i would take the focus off of what you want out of the job and put the focus onto what a great asset you will be due to your experience and skills -it's a matter of personal taste, but i could scratch "Responsibilities *******[d]:" because that's implied -i would keep formatting conventions the same through the whole resume (ie, all dates first, all organizations second and in bold, all positions third and in itallics) -remove the periods from the ends of these lines: Summer Intern, Rinker Materials, Miami, FL. Student member. Treasurer. - Possibly capitalize the C in (GEM) committee Secretary -put the word "expected" before your graduation date -"loaded to failure" makes no sense to me but it probably makes sense to you since you know the mining jargon and i don't you axed for it.

08-24-2005, 07:50 PM	#24
bardy Immortal Location: helllllloooooo!! Posts: 20,831	thanks so much, I used most of your suggestions! I didn't end up including my awards because the names of them are really long and I could only fit one on there... oh well but, seriously, THANKS!

08-24-2005, 08:24 PM	#25
Mayfuck Banned Location: i'm from japan also hollywood Posts: 57,812	Hey no problem thats what friends are for.

08-24-2005, 08:40 PM	#27
DeviousJ CORNFROST Location: GUREITO DESU YO Posts: 24,891	You want really picky? You added a period after FL but not VA. Also, you might want to make your date format more consistent, you have 05/05 for one then you dropped the double digits and went for 8/05. And one of the hyphens is stuck to a date. Maybe put your email under the other address too? Oh there are periods after some of the entries in the last section but not others. I guess you should keep them in so it matches everything else. That's all I got

08-24-2005, 08:44 PM	#28
RopeyLopey Braindead Posts: 15,483	hey Travis, where's the resume? also, I liked the resume of Liz way more ( I mean her own she has posted some time ago)

08-25-2005, 10:16 AM	#30
pink_ribbon_scars At the beginning Location: GJ 1214 b Posts: 10,760	my friend julius hosted mine and my vipbrj edits, so i can't help