Help me edit my resume?

Random Female · 10-21-2002, 04:57 PM

I have never had to do one before, so feel free to help edit. it's for the peace corps. my objective sucks ass so feel freeto help specify an objective.

Elisa Q.
address and telly

Objective: Obtain a position as a volunteer with the Peace Corps and
successfully serve the time specified.

Summary of Qualifications and Education

-Five years of continuous, successful work at various companies performing different
types of jobs. Not once terminated or quit without notice.
-Variety of volunteer work including tutoring and animal care.
-By Summer ‘02 I will have obtained a degree in English from San Diego State
University.
-Graduated High School with honors and maintained a 3.5 GPA throughout community
college and the present university.

Work Experience

June 2002-Oct. 2002. Ikea San Diego. “Ballroom” and store greeter and information
provider. Responsible for child care (ages 3-7) and customer service. Manager Nancy Rhodes.
(619) 563-4532.

September ‘01- May ‘02. Animals Galore. El Cajon, CA. Cashier, customer service,
stockwork, ordering, and paperwork. Manager Sylvia Acevedo. (619) 593-1511.

January ‘01-August ‘01 Petsmart. El Cajon, CA. Cashier and animal care specialist. Manager
DeeDee Thomas. (619) 442-0600.

October ‘99-January ‘01. Animals Galore. Manager Sylvia Acevedo. See above info.

June ‘98-July ‘99. McDonalds. Rancho San Diego, CA. Cashier and food preparation.
Manager Jason Green (619) 670-6673.

Volunteer Experience

Sept. ‘02-Present. “Everyone a Reader Program” at Murdock Elementary School. Tutoring 1st
grade. Christine Cremidan program director. (619) 668-5775.

Aug. ‘00-Dec. ‘00. FOCAS Pet adoption center, located in Petsmart, El Cajon. Program
director no longer available.

I have also had experience as a yoga teacher’s assistant throughout years 1999 and 2000
leading the class and making adjustments. Throughout my time as a regular attendant of the
First Church of Christ Scientist, La Mesa, I have given my time to many activities and projects.
References available upon request.

DeviousJ · 10-21-2002, 08:07 PM

To be honest, I'd create a more Work/Experience focused resumé since you obviously have more to tell them in that regard. You need to expound a little on what it was you did at each place, the responsibilities you had, what you felt you gained from it. If you feel it can relate to the position you're going for, then make the link. Also, you have the right idea with your education section - maybe add any minors you're taking too.

Interests are always a major part too, as they're supposed to give the reader an idea of your personality. Don't just go for the 'reading and socializing' bit - talk a little about any interests you have, especially anything that involves respsonsibility and group activities (the old 'team-player' angle). Nothing about travel? You just went on a trip to China!

Oh, they like whitespace too - which you've done. And try to keep it to 1 page.

Random Female · 10-21-2002, 11:31 PM

Wow, thanks. I'm surprised you remembered the China thing. The thing is that i go into detail about everything so much more on the actual application. I *think* the resume is more of a generalized thing you attach for a formality. erg. dunno.

meow · 10-22-2002, 12:03 AM

DeviousJ is full of good stuff... <3

Just one thing: I heard that they would rather have the references in front of them than having to "request" them...

Also the phrase "not once" doesn't sound right

<3

10-21-2002, 04:57 PM	#1
Random Female Apocalyptic Poster Location: white folks' ghetto, San Diego Posts: 2,005	Help me edit my resume? I have never had to do one before, so feel free to help edit. it's for the peace corps. my objective sucks ass so feel freeto help specify an objective. Elisa Q. address and telly Objective: Obtain a position as a volunteer with the Peace Corps and successfully serve the time specified. Summary of Qualifications and Education -Five years of continuous, successful work at various companies performing different types of jobs. Not once terminated or quit without notice. -Variety of volunteer work including tutoring and animal care. -By Summer ‘02 I will have obtained a degree in English from San Diego State University. -Graduated High School with honors and maintained a 3.5 GPA throughout community college and the present university. Work Experience June 2002-Oct. 2002. Ikea San Diego. “Ballroom” and store greeter and information provider. Responsible for child care (ages 3-7) and customer service. Manager Nancy Rhodes. (619) 563-4532. September ‘01- May ‘02. Animals Galore. El Cajon, CA. Cashier, customer service, stockwork, ordering, and paperwork. Manager Sylvia Acevedo. (619) 593-1511. January ‘01-August ‘01 Petsmart. El Cajon, CA. Cashier and animal care specialist. Manager DeeDee Thomas. (619) 442-0600. October ‘99-January ‘01. Animals Galore. Manager Sylvia Acevedo. See above info. June ‘98-July ‘99. McDonalds. Rancho San Diego, CA. Cashier and food preparation. Manager Jason Green (619) 670-6673. Volunteer Experience Sept. ‘02-Present. “Everyone a Reader Program” at Murdock Elementary School. Tutoring 1st grade. Christine Cremidan program director. (619) 668-5775. Aug. ‘00-Dec. ‘00. FOCAS Pet adoption center, located in Petsmart, El Cajon. Program director no longer available. I have also had experience as a yoga teacher’s assistant throughout years 1999 and 2000 leading the class and making adjustments. Throughout my time as a regular attendant of the First Church of Christ Scientist, La Mesa, I have given my time to many activities and projects. References available upon request.

10-21-2002, 08:07 PM	#2
DeviousJ CORNFROST Location: GUREITO DESU YO Posts: 24,891	To be honest, I'd create a more Work/Experience focused resumé since you obviously have more to tell them in that regard. You need to expound a little on what it was you did at each place, the responsibilities you had, what you felt you gained from it. If you feel it can relate to the position you're going for, then make the link. Also, you have the right idea with your education section - maybe add any minors you're taking too. Interests are always a major part too, as they're supposed to give the reader an idea of your personality. Don't just go for the 'reading and socializing' bit - talk a little about any interests you have, especially anything that involves respsonsibility and group activities (the old 'team-player' angle). Nothing about travel? You just went on a trip to China! Oh, they like whitespace too - which you've done. And try to keep it to 1 page.

10-21-2002, 11:31 PM	#3
Random Female Apocalyptic Poster Location: white folks' ghetto, San Diego Posts: 2,005	Wow, thanks. I'm surprised you remembered the China thing. The thing is that i go into detail about everything so much more on the actual application. I think the resume is more of a generalized thing you attach for a formality. erg. dunno.

10-22-2002, 12:03 AM	#4
meow Netflix Me Location: Human Skull! Posts: 27,712	DeviousJ is full of good stuff... <3 Just one thing: I heard that they would rather have the references in front of them than having to "request" them... Also the phrase "not once" doesn't sound right <3