View Full Version : Critique wanted on new song

The machine of god
08-01-2003, 12:09 AM
Recorded this a couple of days ago. Everyone I've shown it to has been pretty impressed but I'd like to see what others think. It can be found at

Please post all comments (good or bad!) in this thread.


Mood ring
08-02-2003, 10:17 PM
this song has potential and I think its right at 1:28, the drop-off part. thats a nice thing going on from then on until 2:12 and the "clothes will RUNNNN!!!" eeeks. its a little off-key and I kinda winced. maybe its not so much the off-key thing as it seems pushed a bit too much.

the moments leading up to the 1:28 part are fine, but...i like the tone of the voice and the scratchy'esque of it, but I think the 'less is more' philo could work here. Pull everything back on the voice just a wee-bit, volume, reverb, seems a bit forced when just singing easy would do, for 'The Easy'.

so, there it is. You putting together a demo or something? good luck. rock on!

The machine of god
08-04-2003, 07:29 PM
This recording is jsut one of many 1-off demos I've made. Will probably collate them into something more cohesive at some point. Thanks for the comments, anyone else care to through in their 2 cents?

08-04-2003, 10:44 PM
its pretty good, i like the sound of the guitar in the beginning